The black and white raccoon jumped out of the brown cardboard box, chewing a green leaf. Had I disturbed it? Could it have been the loud gunshot that pierced the silence just 1 second ago? Frozen, I sat on my deck chair staring at the clear blue sky...my gaze lowered and I locked eyes with the raccoon. Did he just wink at me??? Wwaaah...I gently outstretched my hand with a piece of lettuce. he cautiously backed away...... .Startled by the noise of the police sirens, he scampered away into the forest. I slowly moved closer to the cardboard box, nervous of what I might find ......
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You just have a knack of writing very engaging stories, James! I love how you, the main character, respected the raccoon's feelings, showing empathy to it. I love how you incorporated in the suburban environment to the setting and supported the reader's visualisation of the scene with strong images. I loved that you left the reader intrigued by where the story might go next, definitely appropriate with the overall tone of the piece. Well done, James!
Mrs P (Team 100WC)
25/5/2020 11:35:58 pm
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