Tim had built a cool new treehouse with his dad but hadn’t been in it for 2 months. One day he asked his dad could he clean it out because it was extremely messy. When he went up the steps he couldn’t believe his eyes. He saw a small raccoon, a tone of leaves and a ripped up box. He couldn’t even see where the chair he put in had gone. Suddenly, Tim heard a loud clap of thunder. He looked at the sky and saw a big bolt of lightning flash right in front of him. He quickly ran inside and never returned to his treehouse again.
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What a clever use of the five word prompt, Tomás! I could really identify with the boy and his treehouse! He was so excited about reclaiming it as his den! He had a clear plan of how to get it organised.. only to realise that it was already occupied... by a raccoon!! The style of writing is excellent, a variety of sentence structure, vocabulary and balance of plot and injection of the character's reaction to it 'I couldn't believe my eyes!' A brilliantly written story Tomás!! Well done! Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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