We disappeared into the night. As I sauntered into the wood with my mates, there was an eerie silence in the wood which made my spine chill. But should I really do this? I took this into consideration but curiousity got the better of me. I found myself in the middle of the woods. While frantically scanning through the trees, I stumbled over a branch. I caught a glance of a ghostly figure with a hood. I screamed for help knowing not a single soul would come to my aid. I closed my eyes in anticipation of what would come next. I felt warm sun on my face. I opened my eyes, only to realise I was in my own bed and it had only been a dream!
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A superb piece of writing Orla! The combination of vocabulary (sauntered, eerie, consideration, frantically, stumbled, glance, soul...) and the variety of ways you build your sentences provides the reader with such a terrific experience of getting lost in your story, absorbed by the voice of your character! You have managed to develop both plot and character by describing each moment that the character is living. As for the ending... I usuallly find using 'it had only been a dream' is so difficult for children to execute but you made it work so skillfully! A great story once again, keep up the good work!!
Team Gaelscoil Chilldara
11/5/2020 04:25:27 am
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