As he passed, he fired a kick at me. Instinctively I jumped out of the way but I'd fallen down a hole. I immediately thought of something and I said "that belt makes you look fat" but the stranger just said "well it doesn't matter what you think, does it" as he threw a big red sign with a flower on it at me. I threw dirt at him as he ran away. I pushed the sign off myself and ran after him.
I was sitting on a bench in the sun when a man came down the road.
As he passed, he fired a kick at me. Instinctively I jumped out of the way but I'd fallen down a hole. I immediately thought of something and I said "that belt makes you look fat" but the stranger just said "well it doesn't matter what you think, does it" as he threw a big red sign with a flower on it at me. I threw dirt at him as he ran away. I pushed the sign off myself and ran after him.
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21/4/2020 06:38:22 am
A super first story Matthew! A seemingly innocent start and then 'boom!' the language changed to 'fired', 'instinctively' and 'immediately'. Then with length of that next sentence with direct speech pulls the reader through the exchange of words. Very effective to demonstrate the heightened feelings of the characters! You have left the reader wondering what happened next, I am curious! You are a great writer, keep up the good work!
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