My heart pounds as I hear it coming at me, my arm ripped off, my deafening screams echoing through the night. I drop to the floor knowing what will happen next….
Sweat drips from my forehead as I rise. Just another nightmare!
Running as fast as my limbs will carry me, I can’t even scream for fear of alerting the pack of ferocious, blood thirsty wolves gaining ground behind me. I risk a backward glance but it's clear that they’ve outwitted me. Half the pack are behind me but I realise that the other half are already flanking both sides and more await my arrival in the clearing ahead.
My heart pounds as I hear it coming at me, my arm ripped off, my deafening screams echoing through the night. I drop to the floor knowing what will happen next…. Sweat drips from my forehead as I rise. Just another nightmare!
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Danny, this just isn't good enough... the 100 words that you write leaves me wanting to read a whole chapter... even a whole book! I thoroughly enjoy your writing. The writing is bordering on being more poetry than prose. There is not one standard sentence! You have curated each sentence's structure and this removes the predictability for the reader as to what you will say, making it intellectually stimulating. I have read your story over and over.... it puts all senses on alert!! I am struggling to pick a favourite part but I keep coming back to 'Half the pack are behind me but I realise that the other half are already flanking both sides and more await my arrival in the clearing ahead'. It's a long sentence that builds tension as it goes and each extention adds details to which the reader can create the visual image. Danny... I am blown away by your writing and not a week has passed that my expectation of what you might write been met... but instead surpassed. Well done!!
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