100WC Charlie R

3/4/2020

Last night, I went for a run on the beach when I noticed a lost diamond. I grabbed it and turned around to see if anyone was looking. I dashed home at 30mph and stumbled upstairs into my room. I cleaned the dusty diamond till it sparkled and hid it behind a book.
Today, when I returned to the beach I saw a man sprint- ing everywhere looking upset. He came up to me and exclaimed “have you seen a diamond?”. It’s the last of the Inca Tribe. I thought “Was this really the only Inca diamond left in the world!!!”...

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3/4/2020 03:15:20 am

Another 'gem' of a story Charlie! You use fantastic vocabulary 'grabbed', 'dashed' and 'stumbled' to demonstrate how the character was feeling without stating it... a skill called 'show don't tell'. I was also impressed how you kept the reader interested in the lost diamond with further information regarding its source. I am trying to predict what the boy will do next... return it or keep it??! Very intriguing! Well done Charlie!

Charlie

3/4/2020 07:14:24 am

Thanks I enjoyed writing it!!!

Máire O'Keeffe

5/4/2020 07:39:50 am

Hi Charlie
Am I right in thinking that you have successfully used the two prompts in your 100 word challenge for this week? Congratulations! You drew me into your story from the very beginning and I was hooked! Imagine finding a diamond while running on the beach. I think when you 'turned around to see if anyone was looking' I began to wonder what you were planning to do with the diamond. You really left it on an incredible cliffhanger wondering if this was "really the only Inca diamond left in the world" and I'm trying to decide are you going to take pity on the upset man and give it back or are you going to keep it?? I'd love to know what happens next. Well done Great writing!
Máire O'Keeffe (Team 100wc)
Galway Ireland

Grace

20/4/2020 02:36:57 pm

I really liked your story it was really creative and if I'm being honest I always like a bit of a crazy character in a story over all I would say your story is really NOICE

Charlie

22/4/2020 01:24:10 am

Thanks Máire, I have no ending for the story....its a mystery... but if I write one I can post it here.

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