The Full moon was out; Emma was outside around the campfire singing songs. Every time a full moon appeared, Emma and her family camped out under the stars Emma loved it! But that night Emma`s brother told her a scary story about the full moon and Emma was frightened. She quickly ran upstairs and stayed there for a while until she heard a noise so she ran downstairs. It wasn`t any of her family, it was the moon and Emma was transported into the sky, she had no idea where she was or how she could get back.
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As with the best narratives Caoimhe, you had lulled me into a false sense of security. Your story was following predictable comfort zones of 'I enjoy time with my family' and 'My brother tries to scary me'. However I was not expecting the ending of 'Emma was transported into the sky'... I loved it! As a reader, I have so many questions!! You have left me wanting to know more and that is what brilliant writers do.. they hook the reader's curiousity! I felt that what happened to Emma was not threatening but rather an adventure. Am I right?! A super first 100WC. Well done! Your comment will be posted after it is approved.
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